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So peaceful

Little long of an intro, but the piano and it's melody definitely made up for that, because I didn't want the mood to end.

Some tips: I would add some percussion every few bars or so just to spice it up and make it not so repetitive. Some crashes, backward ones too, with reverb and delay would be perfect for this.

Other than that, this song is beautiful, keep it up!

Also do me a favor please :D I just finished a trance track called Ticking away, check it out if you get a chance and please give some criticism :) Thanks!
http://www.newgrounds_.com/audio/list en/442960 (remove underscore)

FortyMedals responds:

thank you for the tips and the kind comment,i do think the intro is long myself, i will have to edit it and fix it, thank you so much and i will check yours out too !

Excellent vocal mix

I really enjoy the way the voice mixes in with the track. A little opinion of mine though as a trance fan: at 3:00 and past when the vocals are alone with the hat playing every odd bar, I myself would add something to spice it up just a little bit. Maybe a slow paced drum beat even.

Anyway, great piece! I enjoyed it. Check out some of my 2011 Trance WIP's! I'll also be taking a look at Europhic nation. Looks like something of interest ^_^
~Patrick

Envisage123 responds:

Thank you so much for the review! The sad thing is that although the piece is finished, it's never perfect :P. I could have added so much more to make this track to make it even more epic!

I appreciate the review!

Killer Bassline

Excellent composition overall. I like your choice of melody progressions. They really carry out emotion the way that I love.

I enjoy the bassline that starts right from the beginning, it's filled with energy.

I wish I could give more advise, but I'm tired and my brain isn't functioning the way I wish it was xD.

Anyway, great song again, and if you get a chance, check out some of my 2011 Trance WIP's!
~Patrick

Omnivore responds:

Yeah, No prob! And Thanks!

xD :D

This song just made my night :P

Thermometer responds:

wow thankyou good sir :P xD

Holy Smokes what a surprise!

Decided to check you out after you reviewed one of my tunes... and my goodness I'm glad I did!

I love the synth used throughout the song, gives such mood - unravels such emotion!

Little distorted around 0:55, 1:44, etc. No big deal, just some miner EQ/Mastering issues.

Can't wait to hear the full version. Send me a PM when its done

Ps, is this also done by another artist? I've heard of a guy named deadmau5, but I've never bothered to look into him.

Keep It up
~Patrick

D-Chain responds:

thanks patrick!!!
finally a usefull review, with all the respect to the others ofcourse.

itll take some while to finish it, but ill def gonna pm you when this is completed.

and yet some minor distortion in the overall but ill try to get it smoothier.

and yet this 'kind' of house-style could also be mastered by deadmau5 and other great artists.
usually i would prefer Dmau5, but the more i diggg into it the more artists.

and no this song isnt done by another artist .. not that i know off.
i suggest you look into Dmau5 some time..
take care and also goodluck in the future!

`-' Timo

Quite dancable especially when -

- on extacy!

Digging the chords you chose to lay the song upon. Sound nice

Little repeatative toward the end

Suggestion if you're planning on extending: swap the song around a bit - add something new, a new sound or new layout completely.

Keep it up tho!
~Absolix

steven-mcl responds:

Yeah, I've been thinking about extending it and I can't get anything going for it. So I think I might scrap that idea for later on. Anyway, thanks for the rating. :D

- Zerest

My review

Not bad... Considering I see that you're fairly new in the music business. However, you my friend have some originality going here. Though this is not electronic, I bet you could add a swing to this!
If you wanted to get more into electronic, then you should start with your basic dance loops.
Start out with your kick, hi-hats, claps, etc.
Add your Synths: Plucks, leads, pads, bass, strings, etc.
Play around a bit with notes that sound good when played together! It may take time, and it may look like you're going nowhere, but when you find something that's just right, it can be made a masterpiece.

Xarosas responds:

Thx alot dude but the sad thing is that I only have the fl9 demo
But when I buy the full version I'll be sure to work on this a bit
Thx again for the review
-Xarosas

AHHHHHHHHHHHH

TKTSH-AHHH!

Archealor responds:

raa

My Review

As requested, I will review this piece for you.

Intro

First off, I'm digging the frequencies used on your kick... rides nice n smooth through my Altec Lansing speakers. Bass blows really nice with it.

The bass is nice n crisp, digging that too, thing I like, is that the bass is distinguishable from the actual kick itself. Thats good.

Decent job with the EQ.

Could do with a shorter introduction / entry toward the breakdown. But I like the way that you enter the breakdown by smoothing up your song by releasing the sounds one by one.

Onto the Breakdown

Harmonic, Good use in volume levels with the primary lead... even tho it scared the shit outa me - could be lowered a bit, then brought progressively louder, instead of scaring the listener.
What I would do, instead of introducing all of the primary chords right away, I'd start with something more harmonic, like a sine, bells, or something else that sounds good with a pad that increases overall relaxation in the listener. Start by introducing some keys, then work your way up with the volume.
You should be revealing all of the keys in your release, or right before it, giving the climax point.
I found the breakdown to be not much of an attention grabber, but more of a transition. Breakdowns are critical in trance, it just makes it sound better when chords are built upon other cords, with a nice soothing pad in the background if you get my idea.

Release

Your release is somewhat... climactic in a way. It does have a bit of energy to it, but due to the fact the same keys, and same sound was played in both this part, and the breakdown, it lost potential energy that, in my opinion, would make this song better.
Your exit toward the end of the song (calming the mood down), was decent. I like your choice in body, bringing the melody back once again for a second strike.
Bass kicks in, nice, time for the song to progress toward the end.

End

Similar sounds that I heard in the beginning, similar patterns. Good.
I like this.

OVERALL. And Advice

In my opinion, if you were to make your own trance song, (and Im going to mention this anyway because it is pretty important, and it makes any song not so repeatative), is to give your song some original transitions.
When I say transitions, I dont mean like upbuilds n downbuilds, I mean like changing the pattern say, every 16 bars, just to give some extra kick.
What I do, is I've been learning to play with transitions, and for a whole 4 bars, I'll mute almost every percussion that is playing, then re-arrange my kick to the very last few bars of the 4, to make it have the sort of feeling that something is about to come up.
After a transition, A new percussion, or a new sound / lead generally should arrise from the blue. Instead of making it come out of nowhere without a transition, it seems to flow better with one.
Just a thought!

I'd get you to review some of my songs, but I havent been able to work on many, because I don't have my personal computer until my family gets back from vacation. Shame :P
Keep it up~ Patrick Marshall

D-Chain responds:

that is seriously one hell of a review dude :)
i really like how you can explain ANY detail this remix include. i respect that.

as for the WHOLE review, i shall take the usefull pointers out, and take it to a final
" Release " of this remix, and make a preview [once again] for the NG listeners.

and just to make something claer; yes, i also scared the hell outta myself with that blasting lead in the breakdown XD
-no explaination needed :) im gonna fix it.

T.

Majestic Chords..

I can so picture a climax building.. but.. oh my friend, I could put a feeling unlike no other on this song... an emotion unlike no other.
All inside my head, I feel it. The very chords that bind this masterpiece together can be again rebuild, mentally tainting the minds of millions of people...
I can see this being up in lights, Armada taking hold of this piece after some fixes, a clean structure retake, a climax, leaving every human being who knows what music is, with the feeling of awe in their head!!

You should see what this piece can do, it can go somewhere. If you wish, I will be as best help as i can if you want to take the time to PM me.
Best of luck with this piece, may it take you to a place never seen by anybody on newgrounds.

May it become, More than just an Audio portal favourite.. remember that !

~Kind Regards, Patrick Marshall ~ Absolix

aliaspharow responds:

hmmm... i guess it could take a bit more work now that you mention it. Sure il give it a go =D thanks man

I enjoy making Trance music, and I also enjoy criticizing other peoples trance music that is in dire need of a helping hand.

Patrick @Absolix

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